Wzorowałam się na różnych listach, które znalazłam w internecie, możliwe też że dojdzie mi jeszcze jedna referencja z opieki nad dziećmi ale to okaże się niedługo.
Dear future
host family,
Thank you
for choosing me as a possible au pair for your family.
I would
like to use this opportunity to introduce myself to you. My name is Adrianna
Manias but everybody says just Ada
to me. I am 19 years old and I live in one of the biggest city in Poland Łódź (in
English mean Boat). I live there with my mother younger brother and my
grandmother. My mother name is Marlena and she is 40 years old. My younger
brother is name Adam he is 7 years old. My grandmother name is Irena and she is
68 years old.
This year I will graduate a high school. My school profile is mathematics physics and
This year I will graduate a high school. My school profile is mathematics physics and
informatics.
I would
describe myself as reliable, caring, friendly, helpful and tolerant. I try to
make the best of every situation. My friends are very important to me. I try to
help them if they have problems and I´m always there for them.
In my spare
time I like hanging out with my friends, reading books and taking photos. I
also love traveling. I have been to Spain,
Greece on Rhodos,
Germany, Switzerland, France, Monaco,
Venice. I love spending time in an active
way. I used to be a basketball player for 7 years now with my old team we are practicing
at school and we are playing in a school competitions. I like playing beach
volleyball, riding a horse, jogging, riding a bike. I also like table tennis,
tennis, swimming.
In the
following I will describe you my childcare-experience.
Since my
brother was born I have spent time with him.
Here are a
few things I have made with him. When he was younger I bottle-fed him. I took a
walk with him with buggy. Now I play with him a lot. Adam loves all
kinds of puzzles and tasks
so we play board
games a lot. Together we wrote a fairytale. We also dance and sing together. I
love to read him to sleep. I also take care of my cousin Julka. She is 12 years old and I have know her for so many years. I help her with her homework.
Together we go to the cinema, play basketball, go horse riding.
I also take
care of six-year old Franek. I usually take care of him once a week in the
afternoon until his sister or father come home.
He loves spider man so we play together. I am a lady in distress and he
is my hero. But
I also help him learn the letters.
And I read him fairytales.
That is
just a small summary of my experience I have made with all them.
Now I will
describe you why I want to be an au pair in the United States.
I want to
be an au pair because I can deal with kids and I like it a lot. And of course,
the kids like me, too! I love to spend time with kids and make them happy and
every smile of a child makes me happy. I think these are good conditions for
being an au pair. I wouldn't have a problem to leave my family for a year
because in my opinion I am a flexible person. And I become more independent,
self-confident and open-minded by spending an exciting year abroad. It has been
one of my biggest dream since I was a little girl spending time in a typical
american family. Furthermore this year could be a great opportunity for me
because besides taking care of children I could improve my english-skills, meeting
new friends and seeing other culture than the European. I am think this year
could be the best year of my life and it will be very important to me.
I can add
that I am a driver since 2013. I ride every day because
I have my own car and I didn't have a
car accident. I
drove in different weather conditions like snow, rain and sunny weather .
I hope this
letter is giving you an interesting insight into my life and I am looking forward
to my year with you in the United
States!
Many greetings from Poland,
Ada.
Many greetings from Poland,
Ada.
krotko zwiezle i na temat ;) a o prawku to gdzie sie wspomina w driving letter? trzeba taki list do proworku?
OdpowiedzUsuńA wiesz, że nie wiem jak się dowiem to napiszę.
UsuńMarlena mi napisała tak: "... wystarczy kilka zdań: że je posiadasz, od kiedy, jak często jeździsz, że nigdy nie miałaś wypadku i że jesteś ostrożnym kierowcą. Tak na prawdę nie trzeba tego pisać - nie ma takich wymogów, ale warto, bo Amerykanie mają bzika na punkcie prowadzenia samochodu. "
Usuńtrzeci akapit "I usually take care of him once time a week " powinno być bez "time"
OdpowiedzUsuńdalej - so we play together
But I also help...
Moim zdaniem fajnie byłoby połączyć trochę tych zdań ze sobą, ponieważ są bardzo krótkie - lepiej wyglądałoby mniej, ale bardziej rozbudowanych.
Zamiast zwrotów "I will tell you...", "I will describe" po prostu zaczęłabym pisać o tym lub dała nagłówki np "childcare experience" i tu opis.
Tak rzuciło mi się to po przeczytaniu, choć to opinie subiektywne :)
Przepraszam, jeśli zbyt ingerujące ^^
Nie spoko, dzięki zaraz coś pozmieniam :)
UsuńKrótko i fajnie napisany list :)
OdpowiedzUsuńMam nadzieję, że nie będzie za krótki :P
UsuńGeneralnie bardzo fajnie napisane, powodzenia :)
OdpowiedzUsuńJuż od jakiegoś czasu obserwuję Twojego bloga i mam nadzieję, że znajdziesz tę wymarzoną rodzinkę na cały rok :)
Pozdrawiam i zapraszam na bloga,
Marta
Dziękuję, dziękuję, dziękuję, dzięuję :)
UsuńJest ok, ale brakuje sporo przecinków. I jeden, wielki błąd, który rzucił mi się w oczy: nie jesteś kierowcą from, tylko since!
OdpowiedzUsuńSuper, dzięki!
Usuń